As for the start, I too feel that the beginning weighs the rest of the piece down. It was hard to get a good clear beginning out of Payton and generally to know how much coaching to do for something like that. Joe, I'm guessing you take what the diarists give you and take charge of coming up with scenes from there. But how much to coach a person when they haven't given you're in need of a beginning, ending or transition? And the idea that things need HAPPEN is so obviously simple but is also not something I had a good understanding of until you wrote it just now.
Eve, several people have mentioned feeling the piece ends abruptly and it is hard to know what to do with that. We're going to post another ending we tossed back and forth with tape from after Payton's mom was out. We decided it was too much but I'd be interested to hear people's thoughts.
Thanks for the great feedback and discussion,
Chana
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